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I'm currently posting snippets from Starquest, Volume 1 in the Destiny Trilogy . The more she gets to know the crew, the more Jess feels uneasy about Kerry Marchant, the ship's second in command. The cover for Starquest did not quite depict Jess as I imagined her, in fact the model is very different from the young woman I had in mind. I loved the background but wish I could have asked the cover artist to change the model. This is more like I how imagine Jess:Here's the link to last week's excerpt
EXCERPT FROM STARQUEST (Slight editing of punctuation to conform with sentence count)
It had been a mistake to bring her on board.
Kerry Marchant studied Jess out of the corner of his eye while ostensibly examining the circuitry in one of the control panels on the flight deck. But of course they’d had no option, she would have died without their assistance.
He was struck by how gracefully she moved, the slender curves of her body accentuated by the dark green bodysuit of clinging, soft synthehide. Her thick, flame-red hair hung in waves over her shoulders and down her back. There was no denying she was pretty. He allowed himself a half smile - no she was far more than ‘pretty.’ He’d had his share of beautiful women in the past, although none of them had made a lasting impression. It was not that Kerry disliked women; there were even one or two, like Zeldra, whom he not only liked but admired and respected. He simply did not trust the majority of them.
This and the other two books in the Destiny Trilogy can be seen and purchased at:
https://www.amazon.com/Hywela-Lyn/e/B002BMBXH4/
(All three books can be read as 'standalones')
STARQUEST BLURB:
When Jestine Darnell is rescued from her sabotaged starship by the crew of the Destiny her only objective is to complete her mission and keep her promise to save a world from slavery. Love is the last thing on her mind. However, she has not counted on losing her heart to Kerry Marchant the ship’s second in command, who makes his distrust of her painfully obvious, despite the chemistry between them. The completion of her mission has consequences that neither of them could have foreseen.
Enter Dahll Tarron, who becomes involved in a long and dangerous quest to find the Destiny. Fates become intertwined, perils shared, culminating in the realization that sometimes love may be so close that there is a danger it will not be recognized until it is too late…
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I wonder who hurt him in the past to make him distrust women so much.
ReplyDeleteYou're right, Jessica, he hasn't has a great experience with women in the past - and actually a lot of that is elaborated on in the third book of the series, 'Beloved Enemy'. Thanks for coming by.
DeleteLovely description, Hywela. I am also intrigued by Kerry's mistrust of women. Makes for a good tale!
ReplyDeleteHi Kim, thanks so much - and I'm glad you found this snippet intriguing! :)
DeleteI sense this appraisal isn't just cursory. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteHi Kimberly - you know, I think you're absolutely right about that! Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteI have a feeling he'll be getting over that distrust but not without a lot of difficulties along the way! Enjoyed the snippet...
ReplyDeleteHi Veronica, thanks for visiting and commenting - yes, there have to be some pretty significant revelations and difficult decisions before Jess can chip through that shield he's put around his heart!
DeleteYou're setting up a great inner conflict in the hero. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sue, good to know the conflict comes through!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing. You've built quite a background already. I look forward to the next part.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Charmaine, so glad you enjoyed it. Next bit next week! :)
DeleteI know what you mean about covers, but readers always picture the H/H through their own imagination's eye. Poor Kerry. Suspicion is not going to win the upper hand.
ReplyDeleteYou're absolutely right about covers Nancy - but I think it must be confusing to have a dark haired girl on the cover when the heroine is described as having 'flame coloured hair'. Still, as you say, the reader uses their own imagination. You're right about Kerry too, However hard he fights it, this is one battle his heart's not going to win!
DeleteShe sounds lovely- and I love the model you chose.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina, I have to admit I got very fond of Jess. Glad you like the model - she has the air of innocence and sincerity I was trying to convey i the character.
DeleteEven though he's a suspicious character, he's the love interest? Good choice.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ed, Kerry tries hard to hide his heart, but it's in there somewhere! :)
DeleteSomeone must have hurt him in the past.
ReplyDeleteHello Elaine - yes, he has more than one reason to mistrust women!
DeleteVery descriptive and tells a lot about him. Nice!
ReplyDeleteThanks Amy - glad you liked the snippet!
DeleteGreat insight into Kerry. Low opinion. Certainly explains his reaction to Jestine. Too bad about the cover image. That girl sure doesn't have "flame-red hair."
ReplyDeleteI forgot to sign up, but I still posted my snippet. http://dianeburton.blogspot.com/
Thanks Diane - yes - the annoying thing about the cover is that the cover artist is lovely and I know she would have changed the model if I'd asked her - but it was my first book and I didn't know I could have sent a picture of the sort of model I had in mind. My second and third covers in the series were exactly what I wanted, although the third one, Beloved Enemy, was done by a different cover artist because the first one had left my publisher - and she used both the models I asked for - including Jimmy Thomas for Kerry!
DeleteForgot to say I went to your post and commented - great excerpt!
DeleteI like your image of Jess better, too--and it fits your description of her.
ReplyDeleteThanks Arhuel - glad you like my image of her - she's more or less as I imagined her when I wrote her story!
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