I'm continuing snippets from the draft of my current 'work in progress' a fantasy novel 'The Matchmaker's Mare' which takes place in Wales. The story is told from three p.o.vs. and two time-lines. Today's excerpt is again in Glyn's P.O.V.
(This is only a rough draft to give the gist of the novel, and is subject to change and edits!)
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SNIPPET
Glyn leaned over the fence as the chestnut mare snorted, leapt stiff-legged high in the air, then exploded in a series of bone-shattering leaps and bucks with a violence that would have done justice to a rodeo bronc. All at once she ceased her furious bucking, and stood absolutely still, eyes white-rimmed and wild, body trembling. Dai managed to leap clear in the moment before the pony collapsed and lay down on her back in the muddy field, then got up and shook the dirt off himself like a wet dog.
“Don’t worry, I’m not goin’ to,” he muttered, slapping at the mud on his jeans, with a few more choice words. As he walked across the field, he stopped and looked toward the gate leading out of the yard and Glyn followed his gaze. A dark red four-by-four had just driven through, and a young woman with long, nut-brown hair tied back in a ponytail, jumped out, shut the gate after her and came across the yard toward the paddocks
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SNIPPET
Glyn leaned over the fence as the chestnut mare snorted, leapt stiff-legged high in the air, then exploded in a series of bone-shattering leaps and bucks with a violence that would have done justice to a rodeo bronc. All at once she ceased her furious bucking, and stood absolutely still, eyes white-rimmed and wild, body trembling. Dai managed to leap clear in the moment before the pony collapsed and lay down on her back in the muddy field, then got up and shook the dirt off himself like a wet dog.
“Da iawn—well done. That was a close one Dai, you okay?”
“I dunno where this one came from, Glyn,” Dai said, scrambling to his feet and scowling in the pony’s direction, “but I reckon she’s cursed. She may look like an angel when she’s standin’ in a field, but she’s a demon when you get on her, that she is. If the devil has a horse, this must be it, you mark my words.”
“Well don’t take any more chances with her Dai, I don’t want to risk you getting injured.”
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Hmmm, is this the owner coming to retrieve her pony? Haha. Must be the devil, then. ;-)
ReplyDeleteAh...but do we know it's the owner? Thanks for topping by, Teresa x
DeleteExcellent scene setting as always. Very envious of your description of the pony. Just check the last sentence of the first paragraph... who got up?
ReplyDeleteThanks so much - and yes, that sentence is a bit ambiguous, I'll change it to make it obvious that it's Evan! Thanks for pointing it out, one less edit to worry about! :)
DeleteNice visuals! Dare I hope the newcomer will be as hard to tame as the pony?
ReplyDeleteThanks Nancy - she's going to cause a few problems, that's for sure!
DeleteI'm betting the newcomer is the pony's owner--and she's going to show Glyn a thing or two about this horse. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteShe might be...but there again she might not. You'll have to wait 'till next week to find out! :)
DeleteOh yes, trouble heading her way. Well done as always, my friend.
ReplyDeleteAw thanks Charmaine! x
DeleteVery dramatic and kind of foreboding for the future, since the horse just showed up at his place. Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteCurious prediction of the horse. I'm curious to know who the new arrival is.
ReplyDeleteHi Karen - yes, I think Glyn is too! :)
DeleteI can just picture the horse's eyes as she stands there, rigid, though I didn't expect the rolling in the dirt. As for the newcomer, I found the parallels to the horse (ponytail, nut-brown hair) intriguing. Will she be identified in spirit with the horse?
ReplyDeleteThanks Ed - yes, she was determined to get rid of her rider any way she could. Yes, the newcomer is connected to the pony but although I like the way I think your mind is working, it might not be the connection you're thinking of! :)
DeleteTrouble followed by trouble, perhaps? Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much - yes Glyn has problems all right!
DeleteWow. Perfect description of a horse exploding, including the eyes. An angel while standing, the devil when someone's aboard. Yikes! Now what is Glyn going to do? Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the kind words, Diane, yes, as I said above, he has a few problems! :)
DeleteCould the new woman be the pony's owner? Bet she'll be an angel for her.
ReplyDeleteLOL, she might...but I wouldn't bet on it.
ReplyDeleteI think she is interested in the pony.... maybe she will be able to make friend with it enough to ride it. A feminine touch can work miracle.
ReplyDeleteYour right about the feminine touch - this is not an ordinary pony though! :)
ReplyDeleteSounds like this wasn't the pony's first rodeo. (I've had a horse lay down with me in the saddle and "collapsed" is an apt description.)
ReplyDeleteLOL, it does happen, and it's not funny if you happen to be the one on top! (Better than being underneath, of course!) Hope you managed to get away like Glyn did!
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